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WALT: write and use a checklist to help us correct our work  .

My name Is Fred the kawai I am In a school of kawai in nawi. Were swimming up to lake nooky for launch  the mission isn't catching the fish it is dodging the fish hooks .

we are at the first line of hooks. we have already lost ten fish. now we are at the nets. Oh no I'm caught in a net luckily I escaped suddenly I'm in to a school of pilchard. I go for one …           

I get caught on a hook . there reeling me in , Then I come out of  a wave.  I'm getting dragged out of the water I'm dead ……..