Thursday 19 May 2016

Beakey  

Beakey can fly but not to far he likes to be 
cared cross the room but he heats when 
you put him on a robot his best friend is 
relish 
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2 comments:

  1. Mr Corlett11 June 2016 at 15:27

    I like reading about Beaky. I have trouble following your ideas in your poem Flynn.
    Did you mean ...

    Beaky can fly
    But not too far,
    He likes to be carried across the room,
    But he ....

    Can you please re-read it to make sure it makes sense, and re-edit it?

    You might like to write a poem about Relish some time too.

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  2. Mr Corlett11 June 2016 at 15:44

    I like reading about Beaky. I have trouble following your ideas in your poem Flynn.
    Did you mean ...

    Beaky can fly
    But not too far,
    He likes to be carried across the room,
    But he ....

    Can you please re-read it to make sure it makes sense, and re-edit it?

    You might like to write a poem about Relish some time too.

    ReplyDelete

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